Definitely very addicting!
I think the font choice in the menu could be better. Maybe something a little easier to read and more pleasing to the eye. The same could be said for the color scheme. I like that it's colorful, but it seems like random colors from the palette were chosen, instead of sticking to a pre-chosen color scheme.
The different features are fun, and it's very addictive trying to unlock new ones and see what they'll do! I had a hard time getting myself to stop playing.
The game was interesting, and funny. An intriguing storyline so far.
The text in the characters page, and at the very beginning is a little hard to read, which is off-putting for when you're just starting the game. I think a different font choice would help a lot.
After I clicked on "cheats" from the first page I couldn't figure out a way to get back, and had to refresh. It'd be nice if there was a back button here.
I also noticed quite a few typos, which really makes any game feel a lot less professional. Make sure to read through, proofread, and spell check all the text. A few that I caught:
On the first page after you click play it says "so we installed ours teepees..." It should be "our" not "ours."
When Alfy says "I don't know why I allways spend my time..." it should be "always" not "allways."
And when he says "Zouss has 2 pair of pants" it should be "pairs" not "pair."
"The stones location is a secret" should be "The stone's location is a secret."
Sometimes you didn't capitalize Indians and other times you did. It should always be capitalized.
Another note when you click on "Kick her off!" or "She can be a good hostage?" you get a page that says it's the "only" bad ending, yet there are more than one. It shouldn't say it's the only one, if that's the case.
I hope some of my suggestions helped!
So funny! I love the look on his face in the second panel. I also love the barista's hair! I feel like I've seen a barista with that exact haircut before.
As for critique:
The only thing I notice is that the chair looks almost like it's leaning backwards. I think there's something weird going on with the perspective of that part.
Other than that, the comic made me chuckle and the art looks nice! Great job!
First of all, don't be so hard on yourself! Degrading your work in the comments automatically makes people think less of it.
I think this is very well done. I really like the shading and highlighting on the black part of his costume.
I think the highlighting on the face is a little harsh. It makes his face look "shiny" and it's also a little difficult to tell where the light is coming from. (I'm guessing it's backlighting, mixed with some dramatic lighting from directly above him, yet this doesn't quite make sense for where the light is landing on his cheeks.)
The proportions look good except his right eye appears to be larger and slightly higher than the left. I'd recommend flipping the image horizontally part way through your drawing to make sure nothing stands out as being misproportioned.
I think you achieved a serious and dramatic portrait.
haha i really didnt expected to get a big critic review for this ^^ but yeah.
you are right , the one eye is really higher then the other, however copy and paste and mirror is a very dumb idea to go with. i just have to pay some attention thats all.
but yeah thanks ^^
This is gorgeous! I love the face and the hair, and the way it looks like she's being sucked into the darkness.
I can only think of a couple of very small critiques:
Her chin seems just slightly too pointed.
And I'd like to see just a little more detail in the dark area. I get that it's supposed to be darkness, but my eyes wonder around just looking for a little bit more detail or depth. I do like the places where you have added this detail, though! Overall it looks great!
alright thank you! i'll see what i can do! :)
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